• Story: The Trespasser

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    I really need more Big mac and Gilda images.  Not my favorite characters but I don't have enough for this sudden armada of stories about them.
    Description: A thief is on Sweet Apple Acres and the farmer is pissed. Come see how Big Mac deals with Gilda.
    The Trespasser
    Thursday, February 17, 2011 op
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    18 comments:

    1. PacceFebruary 18, 2011 at 1:12 AM

      You know, this is actually really damn good.
      One of the best, I'd say.

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    2. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 1:34 AM

      I really like this! If you told me it was made by Seargent I would have laughed you off, but I was there myself when he posted it.

      Actually... the ending to this makes me want him to write a Gilda x Big Mac fic... doubt he would ever do it though.

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    3. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 9:47 AM

      I was hoping for more shipping... Does that make me a bad person?

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    4. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 12:07 PM

      Good story. Of course, there is a "bad end" to it.

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    5. XFebruary 18, 2011 at 12:51 PM

      @Anonymous
      I think he said he'd think about doing some GildaxMac. Maybe he just needs more pressure to go through with it.

      Also, very good fic.

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    6. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 9:59 PM

      Eyyyup i liked it a lot :3 big mac is SO AWESHUM

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    7. PacceFebruary 21, 2011 at 12:08 AM

      @Anonymous
      The bad end isn't even really that bad.
      It just turns out that Gilda, Big Mac, and AJ are all really really into BDSM.

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    8. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 2:12 PM

      Wow, really good! It actually made me feel for Gilda, despite the huge dick she was being; and it totally captured Big Mac's character. 10/10

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    9. CottonmouthFebruary 25, 2011 at 6:22 PM

      @Anonymous

      I think the best part of this fic was how in-character the characters were. Big Mac was written amazingly well as a simple-minded yet logic-smart down-to-earth pony.

      I also like how Gilda kept a bit of her attitude, but eventually just got exhausted.

      If you ever write anything else like this again Seargent, I'll be there to read it.

      Ain't reading another Cupcakes though.

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    10. AnonymousApril 16, 2011 at 3:04 PM

      I always thought Gilda could be a more sympathetic character. Maybe she'll get a second chance in the show, but I'll take what I can get for now.

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    11. AnonymousApril 22, 2011 at 3:55 AM

      HAY HAY THIS IS NOT A 5 STAR STORY YET BUDDY THERE'S STILL A HALF A STAR LEFT TO GO

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    12. SoundateerMay 4, 2011 at 10:50 AM

      I positively adored this. Sequel needed :3

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    13. La BarataMay 25, 2011 at 12:46 AM

      1. Sequel
      2. DO. NOT. FUCK. WITH . BIG MAC.
      3. Flawless Victory.

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    14. AnonymousJune 1, 2011 at 4:30 AM

      This was beautifully written. Makes me think most of life's problems (and problem people) can be made better by a method like this.

      Brave. Encore. Sequal would be nice. Maybe Trixie steals some apples or something. Oooh Maybe Luna runs away from home and Big Mac finds her. Write that one.

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    15. AnonymousJune 3, 2011 at 10:18 PM

      this reminded me of a story my mom use to tell. when she was younger her uncle was having problems with one of the kids at his orphanage. They figured the only way they could fix the problem they decided was to have the kid live with my mom's family for the summer. He went in one of the most misbehaved kids you'd ever meet and he absolutely hated it there. But the end of summer my mom said he was very polight and friendly, and he voluntarily came back for 5 summers after that.

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    16. AnonymousJune 5, 2011 at 9:38 PM

      This is not shipping. There's not a romantic implication. You should remove the shipping tag, kthx. I felt that the last scene was platonic, which I'm glad for.

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    17. Magical TrevorSeptember 24, 2011 at 9:11 PM

      1. Make another chapter/sequal
      2. Do excellent job
      3. ?????
      4. Profit

      XD Seriously though, Trevor feels slightly jyped! It should be longer, have a sequel, SOMETHING! Please?! It just doesn't feel... Just didn't feel like that story really deserved a shipping tag. It was barely light-shipping as is! A hug doesn't really count for anything if this was/is a one-shot. Now if a second chapter IS incoming, then one will take that back, but as is, this isn't a shipping fic. (It was well-written, don't get one wrong, but it just... Left one feeling VERY disappoint.)

      ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

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    18. AnonymousJanuary 21, 2012 at 12:48 AM

      Thank you for writing this

      -CaravanPalace

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