• Story:Twilight/RainbowDash (untitled)

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    [Shipping] Some TwilightxRainbowDash for the Valentines Shipping Event!
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    Twilight/RainbowDash
    Monday, February 14, 2011 op
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    7 comments:

    1. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 6:45 AM

      Short and sweet, thanks.

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    2. PacceFebruary 14, 2011 at 4:02 PM

      I kinda really liked that.
      Twilight's response was perfect!

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    3. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2011 at 11:10 AM

      The world always needs more Twilight/Rainbow Dash.

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    4. Moar BoarApril 30, 2011 at 1:00 AM

      Too short. Moar Boar wants Moar.

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    5. La BarataMay 24, 2011 at 11:05 PM

      @Moar Boar
      1. Oh GOD I lol'd
      2. Agreed, moar.
      3. D'AWWWWWWWw ^^

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    6. AnonymousJuly 14, 2011 at 8:22 AM

      Aw...

      Lol, short, but nice.

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    7. salsaJuly 19, 2011 at 8:56 AM

      Okay, sorry if this sounds offensive but I have a bit to say on this.

      1. WAY too short.
      2. You needed to put the date in- you can't just build up to it then forget to put it in!
      3. Here's the storyline: Rainbow Dash crashes into the Treebrary; Twilight Sparkle helps Rainbow by fixing up her scratches; Suddenly and without warning Rainbow, (who realizes she has a small crush on Twilight,) jumps out and randomly kisses Twilight; Twilight get's mad at Rainbow so Rainbow kisses her again?
      4. You REALLY needed more plot development. The plot was WAY underdeveloped.
      5. It looks like something a 6-year-old would write in their spare time.

      Okay, other than that I thought the story had some good ideas behind it and had a lot of potential. Next time put just a little more thought into the overall story?

      Thanks!
      -AdmiralCubie

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