• Story: Twilight/Trixie (untitled)

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    [Shipping] Completely missed this one! A new drawfriend this time. Also now updated with better grammar and more story!
    General: A mysterious pony comes into Ponyville but Twilight senses something familiar about her.
    Twilight/Trixie (Untitled)
    teisipäev, 15. veebruar 2011 op
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    26 kommentaari:

    1. Anonüümne15. veebruar 2011, kell 01:46

      Where's the rest of it? It's like it cuts off partway through.

      VastaKustuta
    2. Rent5dogs15. veebruar 2011, kell 09:06

      Yeah, sorry haha. Im going to add a lot more tonight.

      VastaKustuta
    3. bubsAKAvermin15. veebruar 2011, kell 13:35

      nnngh, it kinda looks like it was thrown into a blender.

      I'm just saying that instead of jumping from Twilight to Rainbow to Twilight and back again to Rainbow, try telling all of Rainbow's part first and THEN go to Twilight's part.

      VastaKustuta
    4. Rent5dogs15. veebruar 2011, kell 18:00

      Going to edit a bunch of stuff thanks to a friendly person I met while reviewing my fic.

      VastaKustuta
    5. Anonüümne16. veebruar 2011, kell 03:26

      The last line terrified the HELL out of me...but in a good way XD

      VastaKustuta
    6. Reading Brony16. veebruar 2011, kell 13:22

      @bubsAKAvermin

      Its just a form of story telling. It can actually be quite fun to read at times you just need to keep track of basically two timelines. I feel the transitions between the two are done adequately.

      I look forward to the next part.

      VastaKustuta
    7. Rent5dogs16. veebruar 2011, kell 15:16

      Glad you guys like it. Next part will be up tonight!

      VastaKustuta
    8. Rent5dogs16. veebruar 2011, kell 18:00

      Okay, there we go. Part two is up, and I will be making a part three, but I'm dropping the whole perspective thingy because if I did that it would just be a repeat of Twilights part.
      Any constructive criticism would be great. :D
      Thank you

      VastaKustuta
    9. Rent5dogs17. veebruar 2011, kell 16:19

      Does anyone have anything to say about it?

      VastaKustuta
    10. Anonüümne20. veebruar 2011, kell 09:25

      Is there any more to this cause its getting good, besides that its a great story keep it up!

      VastaKustuta
    11. Anonüümne21. veebruar 2011, kell 02:53

      I like this story, I don't have really a critical point or something

      I just like the story and await the next part eagerly

      VastaKustuta
    12. Anonüümne21. veebruar 2011, kell 13:25

      okay heres what happened. My computer is having a problem so I'll try my best to get the conclusion up. It's written and everything I just don't have the computer to put it up on the document. I'd say it should be up by late tomorrow or Wednesday. Also, there's going to be another short story after it related to this so keep your eyes peeled for that.
      Thanks for all the support guys. :)

      VastaKustuta
    13. Anonüümne22. veebruar 2011, kell 21:51

      Updated the story! With my phone, haha! But still, enjoy and as usual, post any problems or things you want to point out!

      VastaKustuta
    14. Anonüümne22. veebruar 2011, kell 23:02

      broken

      VastaKustuta
    15. Anonüümne22. veebruar 2011, kell 23:40

      >using GOOGLE browser to look at GOOGLE docs
      >you are using an unsupported browser
      waaaaaaaaaat

      VastaKustuta
    16. Sethisto22. veebruar 2011, kell 23:51

      @Anonymous

      I think it's due to his creating it with his iphone, the link looks really weird on firefox too.. it works but looks weird.

      VastaKustuta
    17. Anonüümne23. veebruar 2011, kell 01:16

      lol, at first when Twilight was all "I don't care where you go Spike, but you're not staying here tonight!" it was so reminiscent of someone trying to get rid of their roommate/parents/whoever so they can use the place to get laid, lmao. I was sure there was such a scene coming up in this; but I guess not yet, lol. :P

      VastaKustuta
    18. Anonüümne23. veebruar 2011, kell 04:19

      I can't read it. It just brings me to the google docs homepage.

      VastaKustuta
    19. Anonüümne23. veebruar 2011, kell 05:06

      Derppp. I'll try to fix it

      VastaKustuta
    20. Anonüümne26. veebruar 2011, kell 15:52

      Nice story. I will read the continuation if there ever is one. IF you updated this one I'd suggest rearranging the first parts so that it flows sequentially, the constant shifting of perspective did not work for me. Maybe even add some stuff. -The part with rainbow Dash was pretty uneventful.

      VastaKustuta
    21. Rent5dogs2. märts 2011, kell 22:42

      Thanks for all the feedback guys. It means a lot. Right now, I'm working on a story for the writeoff so I should have something new up on the 14th if you would like to check it out.

      VastaKustuta
    22. Anonüümne7. märts 2011, kell 16:09

      still not working

      Do I really need an account to read it?

      VastaKustuta
    23. Rent5dogs7. märts 2011, kell 20:23

      @Anonymous

      No, you shouldn't. Let me check it.

      VastaKustuta
    24. Anonüümne19. märts 2011, kell 14:38

      Not working yet... goes to the "google docs" main page and stays there.

      VastaKustuta
    25. Anonüümne24. mai 2011, kell 03:18

      google docs homepage? thats not as exciting to read.

      VastaKustuta
    26. Junaid Hussain12. oktoober 2011, kell 22:42

      Wow that romance was astoundingly smooth, until the end 4.5/5 sry

      VastaKustuta

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