• Story: Moonlight Dreams

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    [Shipping] I'm seeing a lot of Luna shipping this valentines day!  Is she the secret representative of the lonely "pony thread on valentines day" people out there?!
    Description: Luna saves Ponyville from a crisis, and gains a rather un-goddess-like crush as well. Part 1 of a few.
    Moonlight Dreams
    Monday, February 14, 2011 op
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    12 comments:

    1. yrthakFebruary 14, 2011 at 1:44 PM

      Author here. Please, be brutal with critique. I need to get better! Thanks.

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    2. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 2:33 PM

      That was nice, but it's not the first Big Mac and Luna story, and well she could do something more awesone when saving Ponyville.

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    3. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 3:15 PM

      I really liked this one, and can't wait to see where it goes.

      For critique, I almost missed the part where she solved the problem as it was only about 1 sentence. Other than that, 5/5.

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    4. MalakaFebruary 14, 2011 at 3:30 PM

      I'll definitely be keeping up with this one.

      Even considering that not much actually happened in this chapter (which isn't really a problem), it could have been much longer.

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    5. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2011 at 12:06 AM

      Cute story, great way to fill the gap of happy Luna fics.

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    6. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 5:03 AM

      For critique I'll say the action of Luna breaking the storm was underwhelming, and felt rather glossed over, but granted it seems more a shipping fic that's not really a big issue.

      Anywho, I look forward to seeing where it goes. I'm definitely enjoying it so far.

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    7. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2011 at 10:31 PM

      Very good, althou yeah it could have been longer but the overall is quite good. You should seriously consider making a sequel :3

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    8. AnonymousFebruary 19, 2011 at 12:04 AM

      To be brusk, MOAR!!!!! please

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    9. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 5:57 PM

      I hope you haven't abandoned this. I really enjoyed it and I'd love to see more. You have obvious skill as a writer; I really think the length was the only thing holding this back.

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    10. DaveJune 10, 2011 at 9:49 PM

      It could certainly be expaned upon. But the idea was nice.

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    11. NutjobJuly 14, 2011 at 10:01 PM

      I didn't mind Luna wiping out the storm to be so effortless. I mean, she's a deity on the hoof. It honestly SHOULD be that simple, wave your hand and the planet bows to your very whims.

      But again, it seems like that's NOT what the point of this story is about. For that, we've got to hang out around Mac's window again the next time the moon rises.

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    12. Haido42July 24, 2011 at 5:20 AM

      it's a really good start. I like how you Luna it portrayed as a great and powerful ruler, but doesn't really quite understand all the things in life. I really hope you write and finish this story up. I really enjoy this kind of love story. I hope you write another part soon!

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