• Story: Fluttering Heart

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    I don't know if I would call this one direct shipping, but it's still some Fluttershy/Dash.
    Description: The day of the Best Young Flier competition, as seen from the eyes of Fluttershy. Can she find the perfect cheer in time to express the feelings in her heart?
    Fluttering Heart
    Monday, February 21, 2011 op
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    22 comments:

    1. Hikuro14February 21, 2011 at 1:23 PM

      dawwwww

      that was a cute story. I thought flutter shys tiny yays were just ADORABLE ^^

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    2. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 1:37 PM

      I love the irony at the end where Dash thinks the pony she heard was someone beside Fluttershy. Very sweet story.

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    3. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 1:49 PM

      yay.

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    4. MuffinFebruary 21, 2011 at 2:02 PM

      WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

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    5. MalakaFebruary 21, 2011 at 2:23 PM

      D'aaaaaaaaaaw.

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    6. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 3:52 PM

      Super adorable. <3

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    7. KieFebruary 21, 2011 at 4:21 PM

      Very well written and definitely felt in character there.

      ...Yay.

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    8. PhoeFebruary 21, 2011 at 4:29 PM

      Wow, look at all these positive comments. This is a warm fuzzy feeling that will stick with me all day.

      I sometimes worry that if my alma mater realized what I was up to, they would demand the return of my degree. But right this moment, I don't think I care. Thanks, everyone!

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    9. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 8:02 PM

      I D'awwwwwed so hard. You are a supurb writer. You interwove your story so well into the original that I felt like it acctualy happened. Also you had no spelling or grammatical mistakes as far as I could find. Keep writing brony, for all of us.

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    10. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 9:22 PM

      This was great.

      Well written, surprisingly in-sync with the episode's happenings - and, I'll admit, I d'awwwed pretty hard at the ending.

      Great job.

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    11. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 9:32 PM

      Fluttershy is too adorable.

      I love this fanfic. <3

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    12. AnonymousFebruary 22, 2011 at 3:18 AM

      Well, my face just melted completely off. This was beyond adorable.

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    13. LawnPygmyFebruary 22, 2011 at 3:30 AM

      Jelloshy made me giggle. :D

      yay~

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    14. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2011 at 9:20 PM

      'Aaaaaawwwwww, that was absolutely adorable Phoe, if you keep on writing I may just have to let out a little "Yay." of my own.

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    15. AnonymousFebruary 27, 2011 at 1:18 AM

      I D'awwwwwwwwed my face off. :)

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    16. AnonymousMarch 3, 2011 at 11:49 PM

      This story made me promptly vomit puppy dogs and rainbows after reading it due to sheer cuteness overload.

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    17. AnonymousApril 26, 2011 at 6:25 PM

      yay. :)

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    18. JApril 29, 2011 at 9:41 AM

      The only signficant criticism I ha ve for this is Fluttershy seemed a bit hostile towards the other ponies' presence. However, that could also be chalked up to Having had her expectations subverted and being stressed.

      My favoirte part, though, was her practising and getting worried she was too loud for that hour.

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    19. BananaJune 9, 2011 at 1:19 AM

      Great story.

      I like the idea of what went to through Fluttershy's mind throughout the whole competition.

      My only qualms with this piece is that it was too short!

      I wanted mooore.

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    20. Ihaveanamebecause?July 21, 2011 at 3:23 AM

      D'aaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

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    21. Virga RainboomJuly 30, 2011 at 1:05 PM

      Phoe, this was well done. I remember when I first saw "Sonic Rainboom" thinking that it was unfair and unkind of Rainbow Dash berating Fluttershy so harshly in front of her friends after she was working so hard to cheer for Dashie. The "I wish -you- guys could come to the show" as if Fluttershy is negligable.

      As another pony said in the comments, "You interwove your story so well into the original that I felt like it actually happened". I kept finding my self agreeing with what you had Fluttershy experiencing at each point. I also felt, "Hey, what the hell is Rarity doing upstaging dear Dashie!"
      At the end, I suppose that Dashie at least had the tenderness to lie to Fluttershy instead of hurt her feelings, which is of course ironic since she didn't have to lie, and sad because Fluttershy soooooo wanted Dashie to hear her loving enthusiasm for Dashie's accomplishment.
      I also wish this was longer, which shows how much I enjoyed it!
      Thanks!

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    22. AnonymousDecember 29, 2011 at 12:02 PM

      there is a sequel called chasing rainbows
      btw i didnt make this or chasing rainbows

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