• Story: Coming Clean

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    [Shipping] HUMANIZED PONIES? IN MY EQUESTRIA?  ...I guess. A new Gilda/Dash by Pacce!
    Description: Back in the old days Gilda had two fears: Dash discovering that Gilda had feelings for her and the girl's shower room.
    Coming Clean

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    Monday, February 28, 2011 op
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    32 comments:

    1. PacceFebruary 28, 2011 at 2:04 AM

      Alternate DA link:
      http://dizzypacce.deviantart.com/#/d3al5e9
      And thanks for posting!

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    2. ButterscotchSundaeFebruary 28, 2011 at 2:57 AM

      @Pacce

      *clop clop clop*

      Awesome!

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    3. PacceFebruary 28, 2011 at 3:01 AM

      @ButterscotchSundae
      Coming from you, you have NO idea how much of a compliment that is.
      That one story with Twilight and Pinkie in a sleeping was the first time in my life that I had to look down and ask, "Why, boner?"

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    4. BrotherPrickleFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:19 AM

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

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    5. BrotherPrickleFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:19 AM

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

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    6. BrotherPrickleFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:19 AM

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

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    7. PacceFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:28 AM

      @BrotherPrickle
      Praise so nice, he had to say it thrice.

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    8. vp21ctFebruary 28, 2011 at 5:04 AM

      Firstly, just to get this out of the way. This is fuckin hot.

      Secondly, the more I read the fanfiction for her, the more I start to sympathise with Gilda. I look through the fandom and almost unanimously the opinion is that, regardless of Dash's orientation, Gilda's gay for dash, and it's the source of her bad attitude. These sorts of stories provide an absolutely fantastic characterization for an otherwise despisable character, and I thank you for writing them :)

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    9. Albatross !!z0yT7Pqnr+yFebruary 28, 2011 at 5:59 AM

      Fantastic. Although I do have to agree with Brother Pickle, you did use the phrase "lower regions" a bit too much. Other than that, fantastic. Reading this probably requires a bit of restraint for some people.

      Clopping, however, is inevitable.

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    10. AnonymousFebruary 28, 2011 at 6:22 AM

      I've learned how desesitize myself to this stuff, however I do have an achille's hoof and I doubt anyone could hit it.

      Slapping coconuts together is something you won't hear from me, but I liked the stories passion.

      From- a random ANotWhyMoose... I mean Anonymoose... Amoosedefinate... Anonymous(finally).

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    11. BrotherPrickleFebruary 28, 2011 at 6:51 AM

      @Pacce

      Well, as the Bellman said in _The Hunting of the Snark_: "What I tell you three times is true."

      ...I'll delete those other two comments now. (Also, did I mention you gave me a boner? We need to form a club. The Three Clopficteers!)

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    12. AnonymousFebruary 28, 2011 at 6:53 AM

      Yeah.. I really shouldn't have read this at work, now I'm a bit flustered myself..
      Good story none the less.. Thanks

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    13. DaffodilFebruary 28, 2011 at 8:37 AM

      Loved it. Gilda/Dash > Dash/Pinkie any day, in my book.

      Though, I will admit we need some sort of ranking system within the Shipping genre. While I don't personally mind, some stories go a lot further than others, and some people may want to avoid the more...detailed works. Iunno, just a thought.

      Again, though, I loved this. 8.32/10

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    14. LovecraftFebruary 28, 2011 at 9:23 AM

      @Daffodil

      "Gilda/Dash > Dash/Pinkie any day, in my book."

      Hah! I'm glad I'm not the only one.

      Anyway, great story, Pacce! You're stories of Gilda, and Cereal Velocity's stories of Trixie, are driving to me write, haha.

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    15. AnonymousFebruary 28, 2011 at 9:31 AM

      Oh man.
      I've been waiting for a fic like this for a while now, and now that it's here I want more!
      But seriously, this is great. Gilda's embarrassment was almost tangible at certain parts, and the emotions overall were very well portrayed.
      Thank you SO MUCH

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    16. Peaches n' CreamFebruary 28, 2011 at 9:53 AM

      Dammit Pacce, you have easily become my favorite writer! I ADORE your GilDash~ Im so glad I got a day off today and was able to read this. O_O Don't stop writing ever, your just way too good to lose.

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    17. pollardyFebruary 28, 2011 at 1:00 PM

      write more, i havn't seen that much of the grade but it was fun reading this one and it actually had a coherent plot :) 5/5

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    18. LazarusFebruary 28, 2011 at 1:55 PM

      Well done, good pacing, good descriptions and a good plot.

      5/5

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    19. ScherzoFebruary 28, 2011 at 3:06 PM

      Cute! Insanely cute while not being overtly salacious. Good jorb, Pacce!

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    20. PacceFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:12 PM

      @Albatross !!z0yT7Pqnr y
      Did some slight rewording.
      "Nether regions" now only appears once.
      Thank god for thersaurususususususus.

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    21. TigerflameFebruary 28, 2011 at 5:57 PM

      Pacce, no matter what you make, ill never hat it, i mean you are soooooooooooooooo good at this!!!

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    22. NaxtsFebruary 28, 2011 at 7:21 PM

      Quality. Thats all I can say, pure quality.

      Pacce, You've outdone yourself =)

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    23. AnonymousFebruary 28, 2011 at 7:43 PM

      Good work, i liked it

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    24. SethistoFebruary 28, 2011 at 10:51 PM

      You should make a pony version

      Just sayin~

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    25. PacceMarch 1, 2011 at 12:13 AM

      @Sethisto
      Wouldn't work for this story, they're always naked.

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    26. ZarkanorfMarch 2, 2011 at 10:33 PM

      @Pacce
      The pony version should involve them putting clothes on, THEN having the sex.

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    27. DaffodilMarch 5, 2011 at 4:35 PM

      @Zarkanorf

      Yes. This. So much this.

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    28. Peaches n' CreamMarch 5, 2011 at 11:36 PM

      @Sethisto

      O_O That would scare me and might induce nightmares...so...the opposite effect of whats happening now =D

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    29. AnonymousMarch 8, 2011 at 4:50 PM

      I am at a loss for words. What do I say about this? Good job? I just don't know anymore. What kind of reception do you expect from this?

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    30. PacceMarch 8, 2011 at 10:35 PM

      @Anonymous
      Well it's written intentionally as a piece of erotica, but it's still a story.
      So if you enjoyed it as a story and/or as a piece of erotica then my work here is done.

      If this confounds you, please offer suggestion as to do better if I do anything similar. If it confounds you BECAUSE it's erotica, then... um... I'm sorry?

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    31. gamblinponyOctober 27, 2011 at 10:46 PM

      Wait so of all the stories ive read so far and It being so vague yet it still gave me the wingest boner was amazing

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    32. Ryn KenFebruary 16, 2012 at 10:48 PM

      anyone who gives this less then a three star rating needs a lesson in love and tolerance.

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