• Story: Coming Clean

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    [Shipping] HUMANIZED PONIES? IN MY EQUESTRIA?  ...I guess. A new Gilda/Dash by Pacce!
    Description: Back in the old days Gilda had two fears: Dash discovering that Gilda had feelings for her and the girl's shower room.
    Coming Clean

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    esmaspäev, 28. veebruar 2011 op
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    1. Pacce28. veebruar 2011, kell 02:04

      Alternate DA link:
      http://dizzypacce.deviantart.com/#/d3al5e9
      And thanks for posting!

      VastaKustuta
    2. ButterscotchSundae28. veebruar 2011, kell 02:57

      @Pacce

      *clop clop clop*

      Awesome!

      VastaKustuta
    3. Pacce28. veebruar 2011, kell 03:01

      @ButterscotchSundae
      Coming from you, you have NO idea how much of a compliment that is.
      That one story with Twilight and Pinkie in a sleeping was the first time in my life that I had to look down and ask, "Why, boner?"

      VastaKustuta
    4. BrotherPrickle28. veebruar 2011, kell 04:19

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

      VastaKustuta
    5. BrotherPrickle28. veebruar 2011, kell 04:19

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

      VastaKustuta
    6. BrotherPrickle28. veebruar 2011, kell 04:19

      @Pacce
      That was beautiful, Pacce. Other than an overuse of "lower regions" (which is justified, since you were trying to keep it, well, clean), it was perfect.

      I'm feeling Gilda a bit more for this. I'll get on that thing we discussed soon.

      Also, if you want some help writing playful and safe/sane/consensual stuff (not to mention really weird), I would suggest finding the comic series XXXenophile. It certainly inspires me.

      VastaKustuta
    7. Pacce28. veebruar 2011, kell 04:28

      @BrotherPrickle
      Praise so nice, he had to say it thrice.

      VastaKustuta
    8. vp21ct28. veebruar 2011, kell 05:04

      Firstly, just to get this out of the way. This is fuckin hot.

      Secondly, the more I read the fanfiction for her, the more I start to sympathise with Gilda. I look through the fandom and almost unanimously the opinion is that, regardless of Dash's orientation, Gilda's gay for dash, and it's the source of her bad attitude. These sorts of stories provide an absolutely fantastic characterization for an otherwise despisable character, and I thank you for writing them :)

      VastaKustuta
    9. Albatross !!z0yT7Pqnr+y28. veebruar 2011, kell 05:59

      Fantastic. Although I do have to agree with Brother Pickle, you did use the phrase "lower regions" a bit too much. Other than that, fantastic. Reading this probably requires a bit of restraint for some people.

      Clopping, however, is inevitable.

      VastaKustuta
    10. Anonüümne28. veebruar 2011, kell 06:22

      I've learned how desesitize myself to this stuff, however I do have an achille's hoof and I doubt anyone could hit it.

      Slapping coconuts together is something you won't hear from me, but I liked the stories passion.

      From- a random ANotWhyMoose... I mean Anonymoose... Amoosedefinate... Anonymous(finally).

      VastaKustuta
    11. BrotherPrickle28. veebruar 2011, kell 06:51

      @Pacce

      Well, as the Bellman said in _The Hunting of the Snark_: "What I tell you three times is true."

      ...I'll delete those other two comments now. (Also, did I mention you gave me a boner? We need to form a club. The Three Clopficteers!)

      VastaKustuta
    12. Anonüümne28. veebruar 2011, kell 06:53

      Yeah.. I really shouldn't have read this at work, now I'm a bit flustered myself..
      Good story none the less.. Thanks

      VastaKustuta
    13. Daffodil28. veebruar 2011, kell 08:37

      Loved it. Gilda/Dash > Dash/Pinkie any day, in my book.

      Though, I will admit we need some sort of ranking system within the Shipping genre. While I don't personally mind, some stories go a lot further than others, and some people may want to avoid the more...detailed works. Iunno, just a thought.

      Again, though, I loved this. 8.32/10

      VastaKustuta
    14. Lovecraft28. veebruar 2011, kell 09:23

      @Daffodil

      "Gilda/Dash > Dash/Pinkie any day, in my book."

      Hah! I'm glad I'm not the only one.

      Anyway, great story, Pacce! You're stories of Gilda, and Cereal Velocity's stories of Trixie, are driving to me write, haha.

      VastaKustuta
    15. Anonüümne28. veebruar 2011, kell 09:31

      Oh man.
      I've been waiting for a fic like this for a while now, and now that it's here I want more!
      But seriously, this is great. Gilda's embarrassment was almost tangible at certain parts, and the emotions overall were very well portrayed.
      Thank you SO MUCH

      VastaKustuta
    16. Peaches n' Cream28. veebruar 2011, kell 09:53

      Dammit Pacce, you have easily become my favorite writer! I ADORE your GilDash~ Im so glad I got a day off today and was able to read this. O_O Don't stop writing ever, your just way too good to lose.

      VastaKustuta
    17. pollardy28. veebruar 2011, kell 13:00

      write more, i havn't seen that much of the grade but it was fun reading this one and it actually had a coherent plot :) 5/5

      VastaKustuta
    18. Lazarus28. veebruar 2011, kell 13:55

      Well done, good pacing, good descriptions and a good plot.

      5/5

      VastaKustuta
    19. Scherzo28. veebruar 2011, kell 15:06

      Cute! Insanely cute while not being overtly salacious. Good jorb, Pacce!

      VastaKustuta
    20. Pacce28. veebruar 2011, kell 16:12

      @Albatross !!z0yT7Pqnr y
      Did some slight rewording.
      "Nether regions" now only appears once.
      Thank god for thersaurususususususus.

      VastaKustuta
    21. Tigerflame28. veebruar 2011, kell 17:57

      Pacce, no matter what you make, ill never hat it, i mean you are soooooooooooooooo good at this!!!

      VastaKustuta
    22. Naxts28. veebruar 2011, kell 19:21

      Quality. Thats all I can say, pure quality.

      Pacce, You've outdone yourself =)

      VastaKustuta
    23. Anonüümne28. veebruar 2011, kell 19:43

      Good work, i liked it

      VastaKustuta
    24. Sethisto28. veebruar 2011, kell 22:51

      You should make a pony version

      Just sayin~

      VastaKustuta
    25. Pacce1. märts 2011, kell 00:13

      @Sethisto
      Wouldn't work for this story, they're always naked.

      VastaKustuta
    26. Zarkanorf2. märts 2011, kell 22:33

      @Pacce
      The pony version should involve them putting clothes on, THEN having the sex.

      VastaKustuta
    27. Daffodil5. märts 2011, kell 16:35

      @Zarkanorf

      Yes. This. So much this.

      VastaKustuta
    28. Peaches n' Cream5. märts 2011, kell 23:36

      @Sethisto

      O_O That would scare me and might induce nightmares...so...the opposite effect of whats happening now =D

      VastaKustuta
    29. Anonüümne8. märts 2011, kell 16:50

      I am at a loss for words. What do I say about this? Good job? I just don't know anymore. What kind of reception do you expect from this?

      VastaKustuta
    30. Pacce8. märts 2011, kell 22:35

      @Anonymous
      Well it's written intentionally as a piece of erotica, but it's still a story.
      So if you enjoyed it as a story and/or as a piece of erotica then my work here is done.

      If this confounds you, please offer suggestion as to do better if I do anything similar. If it confounds you BECAUSE it's erotica, then... um... I'm sorry?

      VastaKustuta
    31. gamblinpony27. oktoober 2011, kell 22:46

      Wait so of all the stories ive read so far and It being so vague yet it still gave me the wingest boner was amazing

      VastaKustuta
    32. Ryn Ken16. veebruar 2012, kell 22:48

      anyone who gives this less then a three star rating needs a lesson in love and tolerance.

      VastaKustuta

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