• Story: Between the Downpour and the Everfree

    [Normal] Lazy Pegasus ponies failing at storm stopping!
    Summary: Ordinarily Rainbow Dash and her pegasus team have no problem moving clouds, until a storm they can't control blows in from the Everfree Forest. With ponies in danger, the weather team struggling and Twilight's library being used as an emergency shelter, how can they save Ponyville?
    Between the Downpour and the Everfree

    8 comments:

    1. Great story! I really enjoyed it!

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    2. Nice work! Great to see more Luna, and Derpy's always fun. I thought you captured the sense of the characters' speech very well.

      One typo: "compliment", not "complement".

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    3. One complaint from me is the resolution: Luna appears, fixes everything. No drama, no tension. Otherwise: very enjoyable story.

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    4. Thank you for the comments everyone. They are appreciated. I'm glad you liked it.

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    5. If anyone prefers Google Docs over DeviantArt, I think I've got that figured out now.

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cZbdOpXBhPkD_Vfu76RcQP4XXoq-6Mcx-skcVvlQrTw/edit?hl=en&authkey=CLrjpbQJ

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    6. As I said on dA, nice, fun story. It did seem a little bit rushed in certain parts, but yeah, other than that, it was good.

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