Description: Twilight brews up a mysterious potion and Rainbow Dash is quick to be the first volunteer to try it. Little do both ponies know that the potion Twilight has made is a love potion. And it doesn't take long for Rainbow to fall head over hooves in love with her.Pony Love Potion
25 comments:
Link's messed up, gotta paste into address bar and get rid of that link:%20 thing.
ReplyDeleteyou fucked the link up
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ReplyDeleteThat was elegant.
the ending seemed a bit rushed. but it was still pretty awesome
ReplyDeleteQuite comical and at the same time cute as well.
ReplyDeleteShame Dash doesn't get her wish at the end. But least she can dream.
lol, using a love potion the way Dash did can almost be counted as something like Date Rape, can it not? :P
ReplyDeleteI did get a kick out of Twilight's reactions when she was being molested by Dash in her lab, though, lol.
Blog bro: That 20% shit happens when you put a space in a url. Mind those when you're copy pasting.
ReplyDeletei fixed it
ReplyDeleteThe author really needs to stop with that present tense shit. "Rainbow flies around", "Spike climbs on the table"...
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ReplyDeleteAugh, you know, I didn't notice the present tense at first, but now that you mentioned it, it's really bothering me.
The concept and plot seem pretty interesting though, at least.
You turned Rainbow into a creeper and that makes me sad.
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That's my sad face.
Will we get to see a part 2? After all, a certain baby dragon ate those pancakes as well.
ReplyDeleteGotta echo the anons about the present tense, it's distracting. It takes away from what is otherwise very good prose.
ReplyDeleteI don't know why i thought a story about a love potion wouldn't be creepy; this definitely turned out pretty creepy. Well-written, though.
I happened to have this song on while reading the last few paragraphs and I must say that it was quite fitting and sad music.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GjZRQs2aGE0
Try it.
Wow, it got really really into date rape territory near the end there.
ReplyDeleteBut I still dug where you coming from.
So RD full name is "Rainbow danger dash" also damn you spike for stoping the moment xd
ReplyDeleteGot a little creepy at the end there.
ReplyDeleteOh Spike xD. Here we have Rainbow essentially trying to rape Twilight, and you basically just sit back and grab the popcorn xD
ReplyDelete"Rainbow Dash has rainbow-striped hair because of her name and because she is very interested in sports, specifically flying. She is a tomboy, but nowhere in the show is her sexual orientation ever referenced. As we all know, there are plenty of straight tomboys in the world, and assuming they are lesbians is extremely unfair to both straight and lesbian tomboys."
ReplyDelete-Lauren Faust
Other than that, good fic!
Loved it
ReplyDelete...well that was disturbing as all hell. And to Anon, its not "kind of like date rape" is IS rape.
ReplyDeleteThis story was awesome :)
ReplyDeleteDid I just read something that I can describe as Pony Rape?
ReplyDeleteD'oh well. It's I give it a 4/5
Did dash just technically date rape twilight? Cause lol but still it was well written and adorable as (insert profanity here)
ReplyDeleteYou should do a second part it was good, hopefully we'll see more in the future.
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