• Story: Fluttershy's Despair

    [Grimdark][Sad] Moar pony stories, lots of Fluttershy today finally.

    Fluttershy's Despair

    13 comments:

    1. Whoa! There's a real big problem with that bottom part! Text on the left is unreadable due to being cut-off.

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    2. Man that Shall Keep His PromiseJanuary 31, 2011 at 7:15 PM

      @Anonymous

      Wow, thank you for pointing that out.
      I fixed it.

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    3. Ahh see thats why I like google docs! I can be lazy while you fix it for me lol.

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    4. This would fall under "sad: as well?

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    5. This is the sequel to Fluttershy's Courage, isn't it?

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    6. Not sequel. Counterpoint.

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    7. Counterpoint in this is what COULD have happened if Fluttershy's Courage had failed in the story of the same name.

      I wish I could get in contact with the author for a private critique. Strong and dark story with a glimmer of hope at the end, but there are things he could do to make it stronger and less anticlimatic.

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    8. @Anonymous

      I have to agree with this. After the strong start the ending seemed very... flat. It was good, but the ending let it down.

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    9. Aww :(. All my favorites had to die :(. No really... even Derpy.

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    10. ill admit it. this made me cry.

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    11. ill admit it. this made me cry.

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    12. @WPK4F I am currently crying manly man-tears of manliness.

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